On the Rocks

Let’s clumsily switch hats to reviewer or critic for a moment. When we talk about rock, there’s the rock writers as well. Who knows how much influence is wielded by Rolling Stone or Creem when they’re supposedly just covering the music scene.

I was voracious in fact, and was as likely to devour roneod magazines that had found their way from the underground to the cool kid shop. Rock’s half century is also a product of every garage band in the land; the luck or quirk directing some to greater heights and for longer or shorter periods. It is this fascination amongst the rowdy and unpolished that keeps the movement going as much as any superannuated or swapped rock star. Rock reaches mythic status and it sags under the weight of a dozen groups with no spark to make them special. It isn’t everything but it will pretty much have a go at everything.

With that in mind

You Could Have Told Me is more straightforward than More tally it’s true and this may come from the conscious attempt to ‘look more like a lyric’. More tally doesn’t have a hook and sixties songs, for all their experimentation, had hooks. It travels from the early Liverpool scene, even referencing “I Wanna Hold Your Hand” while ‘mirrored in the myre/pirrhouetting to the pyre’ is a nod to the Jims who round out the decade.

It’s all very well to tell you this but if you were to sit down and deliberately try for gimmickry or the aforementioned referencing that we swore would be naff, I fear the result would show all that and hurt the structure and the conceit. So am I saying that you should stumble on this, as if it can just happen? Yep, you need a fair dose of intuition.

What else is going on behind You Could Have Told Me you ask. The narrative decouples from classic boy meets girl as it presupposes that, in addition to casting some kind of spell on [the narrator] – standard fare for the time – this also means that she can foresee what will happen between them. There is no way otherwise that she could be expected to know how things would turn out.

Possessing those powers makes sense of that ‘mire/pyre’ line while conjuring off the cuff reference to the darker parts of history. There’s a sordid subtext of sacrifice on both sides with him declaring what he surrenders or no longer contemplates.

While it casts too much of a knowing wink to have come from the sixties, it captures some of the spirit that bands have been reviving from the seventies on.

Our seventies rock song is a perfect example of that aforementioned intuition. Having just noted how using a contemporary reference to write a song in a bygone style doesn’t work, here we go again. Only this time, the 60s and 70s fascination with 3D, though taking a different form, offers a perfect segue to looking at the 3D printing that is possible now. I will go out on a limb (a 3D printed one, natch) and declare this one a success.

So what else to say about Some Day My Prints Will Come: given my own penchant for puns, I found the only way to footnote that this one was plagiarised was to declare it upfront. That way we could get on with our seventies rock number.
By chance, the subject matter lends itself to copying so declaring the pun – and someone else’s pun what’s more – is acceptable in this rare instance.

It has a nice build on it too in the three verses, each doing its job well. This despite there being no chorus or other repeated element; the hook we mention above! I think that some sprawling epics that saw rise in that era can excuse the grandiose ‘referents you’ll just have to get’

The eighties rock number sounds like it could have actually made its appearance a decade later but since the nineties seemed like the first decade where all was a postmodern mishmash of existing styles, what does that say?
I think pheromones are a good thing to write about, especially when the subject’s just laying around waiting to be used. It’s quite long though so not suitable for all 80s rock.

Recursive could have been from the nineties but this doesn’t tell us much. Whereas Pheromones keeps to simple repetition of sound and pattern, Recursive is dense, as if, my having already covered the subject of repetition, doing another called Recursive requires a quite different approach. The song is about repetition but doesn’t display any itself.

As I get older, I’m winging it more as I just don’t listen to the same volume of stuff. There are situations and concepts that are perennial
and then there are the references to search engines that date If I Could Have Your Attention Please both on the millenium and during the next ten years. Do rock songs from 2001 or 2002 display this pattern of poetry (if I’m to be honest) where the subjects are reintroduced but in a changed scenario? It doesn’t matter because this whole situation of being able to stream anything we want does speak to this cry for attention that could be even necessary in a crowded marketplace and a distracted populace.
Why not write a song about it?

The fact that it requires a close reading to understand the force of the loudhailer when it’s reintroduced is a test of both the audience and the singer. It asks of the more than casual listener that they do indeed pay attention.

Which brings us to this decade we’re in. I don’t plan any of this, as the lyricist instruction component of this blog is at pains to point out. But one could rap this. A catalogue of spent convictions is not treading on thin ice or anyone with Ice in their name or who takes ice. The listener will bring in their own reading according to their circumstance, their expectations and their musical background but that is not usually our concern.

Follies fully followed til the fellows flew

Like the act of projecting that you’re stealing a stranger’s stuff in using the line ‘Some day my prints will come’ by stating such in the first verse but qualifying its useage; we’re now talking about something bigger.

Here we signal that the patois is of some toffee-nosed git whatever misdemeanours he may or may not have committed, just so you don’t read “could rap it” with the catalogue of spent convictions and think we’re going into dangerous territory. Again, this is the fortuitousness of doing nothing more than sticking to the subject and covering the angle while using arresting language.

There’s lines here that lightly touch on the gaolbird theme but not so you’d notice and it’s possible to see that this is just exactly what it says it is. It’s up to the audience or the band members to make out what nationality or cultural background the narrator is but I don’t think it matters. This could even be reportage with a voice different to that of the perp.

Start to Rock

First: a disclaimer. I tried to figure out how to migrate From the Sound of It to my other website, Wellwrought, but can’t do it so I’m back here.

Why I ever thought it would be good to have a Belay Bob hosting a lyricist blog is anyone’s guess. Now that that’s out of the way..

The antecedents of rock are principally in the fifties: rock’n’roll, rockabilly, rhythm’n’blues but generic rock begins in the fabled 1960’s

Sure, you can point out all the pop and country and big bands with crooners but the foment of the sixties encapsulates much of what we take from the music. This is not to pretend that there is a sixties rock that can represent all the subgenres that began then: heavy metal, hard rock, acid rock

More tally 

This year death has barely drawn a breath
Hardly idle with our idols 
Quakes and shakes soon am I tidal
 measured end and mass incendiary

This time of engaging in gauging crime
from somewhere subhuman to somehow sublime
The devil his due
divulge and you die

Plan it and see if it's spinning through space
the grounds may confound but you still found the place
with pursed lips and pursestrings
groundbreaking discovery

You might think this a trifling peculiar considering how much I have let go through the net in terms of ‘authenticity’ but I’m going to say the above does not meet our criterion; it’s not sixties rock, it’s a poem. There were plenty of poems being written then, some even being performed on stage to muted background music, but we are attempting to encapsulate everything from the bikers to the mods, a stray Ted. We want to keep the hippies happy, prop and prepare protester fare, drag haut cauture and drug culture into the innocent mix

So if we can’t write our song that is secretly about two thousand and sixteen and pass it off as sixties, what next? Besides actually grabbing icons and images from the era and bunging them in and then, when questioned, claim that this represents the chaos and confusion, brother.

The solution is to not indulge in caged metaphor and describe some real incident or place or person, no small irony in doing that considering how much the sixties was hellbent on breaking tradition.

You Could Have Told Me 

You're the consequence of all my recompense
You're patchouli flavoured and Heaven sense
The way I had things planned
 I'd only take your hand
For one more whirl of boy meets girl
You could have told me
How I'd fall for you How I'd call to you
You could have told me
Now I see it's true I need to be with you

You're the destiny and distilled desire
Mirrored in the mire pirrhouetting to the pyre
The things I cherished then
I declared perish them
Since this better plan a woman and a man

(C)
You're the circumstance of when I circled chance
I'll never leave for love or roam for romance
I was sure of something else
Why, while I keep this to myself


Pause

I suppose you could argue that, having had a flick at filk and fiddling with the form, I should complete the folk coverage by charging off to techno-folk and folktronica, but – again, with the kind of disclosure that may only be necessary when describing the relating of ideas or events – I think it’s important that a lyricist knows their limitations and is able to recognise when genres are blind corners. Blind corners are not useful when explored in a songwriting blog.

Besides, I think we have enough data on folk songs to be going on with.

II

The monster in the wings when it comes to genre is rock and that has so many roots and branches that a writer could get up in any one their whole life. Many do.

I want to take a break from genre (and, yes, being anal and completist I did once write a song about Genre Considerations)

Let’s talk a little bit about the inspirations as I believe these are key to committed lyric writing. If you are receptive to whatever comes down the pike then you aren’t held back. Recently I got ‘for those who built houses too close to the ocean/whose pools and pagodas cluster the coast[whose pools in rubble that clutters the coast]’ but that might be insensitive.

The other approach, as we’ve detailed, is to go to the title and the kernel of the idea it contains and work from that. I’d probably use this approach more than working out from lines or couplets but I couldn’t swear to that. You don’t normally stop the flow of what you’re writing to question how it’s being constructed.

The frustrating thing with writing from the potent title is when the original thought or idea is diluted, misdirected or forgotten altogether. This happens. I idly mused on False Alarm (not entirely convinced I haven’t used that one before) and this sublime line about the sirens. Now I’ve got a snippet that’s similar ‘The sirens are sorry they sought your assistance’ In fact, hallelujah, that could be it; it was something about the sirens being sorry

False Alarm 

The sirens resemble the things we love best
assayed and assiduous as we can attest
Deploy the lever on the Great Deceiver
had it up to here with believers

Bells still tell their role to toll
at time defined and in control
So bray and say you'll stay alert
at minor cant and manner curt

Signals single out the code
method in mad nest the motherlode
used to live just up the road

Pious peer at us as though possessed
if we'd rather be blissed than blessed
by luck or pluck arm in arm with charm
Treat the whole thing as a false alarm
The noise knows the news so
roll forward rock to and fro

Blare and blaze and make a racket
when you find what's in the packet
The sirens sound for the final test
importing importance until they're impressed

 

Sung poetry

By now you may be seeing a pattern which suggests, quite unconsciously, that songs are written to a certain requirement. According to the instruments used, the versatility of the musicians, the kind of crowd. Fidelity to a subgenre that was possibly suggested by an overheated hack in the first place, is not something to which one should adhere with any rigidity. Not if you want to be prolific.

My beginnings are in word scraps and then poetry so I absolutely identify with this. The idea of some scant accompaniment to a particulary poignant piece is something I see as desirable, all the while conscious that the audience may see it differently.

I suppose this is why, as a lyricist, I alternate between modes; sometimes more song-driven, at other times, employing the pliability of verse. There’s a certain luxury with not having to be the one to figure out how the piano or guitar can be best employed.

And my heroes are all songpoets though I do admire Iggy’s physicality and Jim Morrison’s deep Dyonisian delivery

Anything can be made into poetry. Which is not the same as saying that anything is poetry. Some things – many things – are too prosaic to make the cut.

Tore Out the Last Page

Trapped in tit for tat and a tat for your tit  
You've ruled in the margin but don't get this bit
As the scene unravels and flags unfurl
and we're back at the beginning of boy meets girl
Dog-eared digressions keep us amused
when the templates for confession have all been used
If you think me foreword I'll append I seize
at the shelf by themself and down on one knee

Indexed a digital dialect
jack in to direct
where once circling the circumspect
no paper caper to correct

A clot in the plot and a a thinning theme
Deus ex machina well we can dream
Characters careening corrupting their leaning

The author affirms the studied bookworms
Ideas and how they carry germs
Fixing the foxing faxing a copy 
Forming our own conclusions

Revival tenterhooks

When I read about the American and British folk revival(s) it does get me thinking that I am a listener and not a composer. All of my information is second hand; either through the media saturation or visitors from those climes.

I did, however, write a song based on the Victorian premier stating he would take in the refugees. It takes its title from this and is called We’ll Take Them In

We’ll Take Them In

We'll absorb the orb of their undoing
a little bit of what they've been through-ing
We're in such a state
where we can relate
 so we'll take them in

We'll redirect the rude aspect
Negotiated as benign neglect
The faith you hold a bride's scold
which culture could you   leave in the cold
 so we'll take them in

No mistaking free for fear
in that sense where we can disappear
It's that incessant intersect
both sides saying they protect

Faux crock

I already feel as though Terse, which is a poem, and Lived Experience have a strong dose of anti-folk without knowing it, but that was always going to happen.

If I was meant to be more influenced by Michele Shocked than Pete or Peggy Seeger then I wasn’t aware of this. As for folk rock, well let’s see if the next piece manages to meet the mandate

Barbed Wire Blues

It's one way to get nimble
as you scramble for safety
through all of these obstacles
Out there barbed wire

in coils and strands
tightened neck height
and hidden 
barbed wire

It's mostly how we negotiate
where barbed wire is drawn straight
relay across hills so we relate

It's getting inbetween & not being caught up
not being stuck in a chorus of fuck
boots best placed planted astride
barbed wire

If someone can lift it off
though I'm green to the mean 
I wouldn't wager my wage on the gauge
or even settle over metal
barbed wire

A scuffle at the scaffold with skiffle playing

Skiffle was a little before my time. What you see in Them Blinkin’ Jets is that, despite choosing an approach and a title that superficially reflect skiffle, a poem emerges that relies on its own pattern to tell its story. Here the device is in the ‘sendin jets’ line whereas surely a skiffle group would feel compelled to put the title to good use. Subtlety is not a byword for skiffle.

The ‘endin jets’ pattern falls down in any case on that ‘that’s us end in jets’ line; clumsy enough to draw the listener’s attention to the device. A real no-no.
Here though it’s just a matter of editing. The stanza would then read

Pose for a product that costs like a planet
breaks the sound barrier by request
worth the existing infrastructure
lets us end in jets

I know there’s risk here because one could read too literally into what or how it ‘lets us end in jets’. Perhaps one cannot invoke the ‘being allowed to/being given permission to’ element without it distracting or detracting from the rest of the message.
But ‘thats us end in jets’ will never fly

Let’s try another approach

Pose for a product that costs like a planet
breaks the sound barrier by request
worth the existing infrastructure
intents end in jets

Too dramatic and not what I was thinking of so

Pose for a product that costs like a planet
breaks the sound barrier by request
worth the existing infrastructure
interests end in jets

Leaving the Country

I think it’s time we left the towns of ten thousand people to decide whether the lack of verse-chorus disqualifies Who was that at the Drive-in? as country rock. It can’t be the melding of life in a sparse rural community with American Graffitti cool nor the simple narrative detailing this setting and all that happens or happened during a typical night at the drives. Country rock would line up pick up trucks in the US and Sandman panelvans here and not try to be clever with valiants (a relatively obscure term) and ‘Ford thinkers’ who are not analogous with forward thinkers.

We’re not pandering to a non- country rock crowd so trust that the Aussie contingent at least, knows that God Save the Queen was the national anthem played before the first film was screened.

The ‘rest pause inbetween’ conflates a strained social convergence in the men’s room, with long forgotten scraps of conversation, with what would now be the push of a button and conceivably shorter in duration.

The sexual reference is just the right amount of nudge nudge wink wink considered tolerable and worthy of the M or MA rating.

The most difficult ask is rendering a poem into country rock, without a catchy chorus and only a near rhyme to finish.

Genre jeopardy

The next question is “Can we work back from the song to determine genre or subgenre?” for you may want this ability if you’ve been contracted to perform Western Swing. I don’t recommend this approach for beginners but when one is writing complete songs without paying much heed to where they fit, it’s a handy skill to have.

Where would one place P.O.V? If you have an insight into its construction, as the writer has, one can see the impetus being the cinematic reference; perhaps some Media Studies coming in handy. Otherwise as a critic or theorist you could note that the song, as with much of this lyricist’s work, circles back around continually on the subject matter:  point of view.

You could then try to separate out the component pieces, the different POVs if you will. If its just to understand the tenor then this could be useful but, since I’ve usually bound up different meanings at each juncture so there are parallel readings, this reduces the options.

Style is less problematic. It’s enigmatic, impressionistic, revels in play on meaning. It is thus unlikely to be blues, jazz, folk, country, rock’n’roll. When it comes to mutant forms, definition is less clear. Assuming Captain Beefheart was working his sound from jazz rather than blues (it’s a distant cousin to rock and distant cousins, there’s a limited supply) Nonetheless, I’m going to make a captain’s call (brr) and say that P.O.V is either one of the many seventies on rock songs – probably eighties – or its electronic, experimental, New Wave, any of the genres that liked to wander off. Except that P.O.V doesn’t wander off. By balancing plates metaphorically speaking it stays more on point than songs with a conventional narrative structure.

There are plenty of individual artists who write in this fashion. Not possessing the same style so much but using the subject matter to drive the plurality rather than reigning in a title to our own purpose.

To do a really scientific analysis of the song you’d want data on the character of songs that end with a title chorus or with a title chorus that plays with the repetition by slightly varying it. You could go impossibly broad and look at the subset of songs with this rhyming structure or the internal rhythm; perhaps you’ll feel the need to consider both.

As to pinpointing what style, form or genre typically uses this pattern, it sits at the less whimsical end of punk-era pop perhaps. This is what I was listening to in my formative years. It sits at the Costello end of verbiage not the Iggy end. I don’t twist my puns to romantic purpose as much as El though. There’s often a cataclysmic clamour and that could come from Echo and the Bunnymen or any number of sources.

Hey, I wouldn’t presume to dictate where a song I’ve written ends up as there are all the musicians and singers and audience putting their energies into it. The Blue Velvets do a great version of Just Like Daddy and they’re a jazz trio

The grass is always bluer (on the other side)

We know how to retrofit songs to genre or not as the case may be. There’s always a fall back if you do have to write a bluegrass number for instance.

  1. Rely on your knowledge of the work of Lester Flatt and Earl Scruggs or Bill Monroe to inform the way you construct the song
  2. Use classics to define the mood
  3. Look at the earliest songs and then note the amount of movement, if any, lyrically
  4. See the way the words fit with the song

When I was looking at what I could bring to bluegrass or take from it, I settled on two things: locale and narrative form

I live in mountains but not Appalachian Mountains so how do I navigate to that form of storytelling. Well, I grew up on a farm but I’ve always understood that to mean, at least in the Australian outback, country (or, as it used to be known at times, country & western)

The standards all have narratives but they vary between first, second and third person and ‘Oh Death‘ and ‘In the Pines‘ switch narrative voices in a kind of one-person call and response. They can be about one person in particular, such as John Henry or about the place they live and the conditions they operate under. For that reason I didn’t think this other song I was writing about Boxes had the right sentiment or style.

There isn’t a lot of metaphor in bluegrass (to the point that that’s really Death talking) so I kept returning to the childhood home. If it wasn’t about rodeos or mustering, or the lives and loves of the countryside then perhaps I could cleave closer to bluegrass than its kissin’ cousin, country

And then I thought about the verandah and that seemed underexplored enough to give fresh paint. At first I was influenced by what I was learning about existing bluegrass numbers and kept the scene literal but once I had that first draft I was able to move into a more poetic but, hopefully, still authentic recreation of a mood or feeling or impression

The Verandah

The verandah the verandah
 I'll see you out there on the verandah

 A day out in the paddock as your thoughts go round and round
 and it's you and other tractors that make the only sound
 Some solvol and a wash bowl it's time to scrub clean
 Waiting for tea and there is me finding a place to lean
 on the verandah
Cosmopolitan capers occur in cafes far away
 but out here in this red dirt is where I've said I'll stay
 With books borrowed from the library
 and a paper a week old
 Where the main instruction is
 just do what you're told
and the only place to escape
 is the verandah
 go outside and play
 on the verandah

I wrote that on the thirtieth. It wasn’t til the third of September that I wrote two more drafts; this time the song had not only loosened its style, it had made other changes that had an effect on both narrative and structure. And it had changed name

Side Verandah Blues

All day long I've been going round
Sharing sounds with my surrounds
Solvol and a wash bowl it's time to scrub clean
Waiting for tea and there's me find a place to lean
 on the verandah

Cosmopolitan capers in clubs far away
While here in the red dirt I've said I'll stay
Read the papers weak and old
The main instruction 'Do what you're told'

and the only place to escape
 is the verandah
go outside and play
 on the verandah

Side Verandah Blues (3)

All day long I've been going round
Sharing sounds with my surrounds
Solvol and a wash bowl it's time to scrub clean
Waiting for tea there's me finding a place to lean
 on the verandah

Cosmopolitan capers in clubs far away
While here in the red dirt I've said I will stay
The news is a week old, weak and old
The only instruction to do what you're told

and the one place to escape
 is the verandah
go outside and play
 on the verandah